Week eight

Workbook activities

Presentation draft


The preparation of writing a successful formal speech should not be underestimated.  It requires preparation, research, writing, review, rehearsal, and delivery (Ames 2016) to successfully maintain the audience’s attention and communicate the message. All these steps were crucial and taken in to consideration while planning assignment three, the Member of Parliament’s maiden speech.

A public communication message should be arranged into four parts: introduction, central idea, body, and conclusion (Berko, Wolvin, & Wolvin 1998 p.327). This proved to be a good base to start my speech and to establish what the main talking points would be.

I next moved on to the arrangement and formatting methods of my speech. Topical arrangement proved to a close guide to follow as the ideas for the speech can be organized on the basis of their similarities ((Berko, Wolvin, & Wolvin 1998 p.336). The speech contains two issues and even though they are not directly related they are politically oriented and the two key speaking points for the MP.

After much research, I settled on the case formatting method as it focuses on the central idea (the MP’s induction to the Legislative Assembly) and body (two main issues).  There is no need for sub-points, which is required by the unfolding method, as it is a maiden speech. The maiden speech is made to primarily to introduce the MP, thank those involved during the campaign and confirm the issues of main concern in the MP’s electorate.  It is not a talking point speech to raise a specific issue.

Planning table

Slide Talking point / script
Visual – Aboriginal and Australian flags


Acknowledgement of traditional land owners


Visual – Mirani Electorate map


Proud to be the first female MP for the Mirani Electorate

What the Electorate means me to

The importance of the Mirani Electorate


Visual – Picture of me with my niece


Introduce family and rhetoric link

Thanks to family, friends and colleagues

Rhetoric link sister’s child with developmental delays


Visual – Dept of Education, Training and Employment logo


Early Childhood Development Programs (ECDPs)

Facts of ECDPs

Importance to children and families

Repercussions if ECDPs end


Visual – FIFO workers FIFO workforce issue in Mirani Electorate

Facts and statistics of FIFO workforce

Impact and implications for families and communities



TBA Conclusion detailing recap of introduction and issues


TBA Restatement detailing commitment to Mirani Electorate and Legislative Assembly

Inspirational quote.

Draft speech presentation


During this activity I discovered a process that I have always done with assignments but never realised there was a technical term for it. Mind mapping comprises a network of connected and related concepts.  It is free-form, spontaneous thinking that is required when creating a mind map, and the aim of mind mapping is to find creative associations between ideas (Davies 2011).  I found this activity particularly difficult to comprehend in the beginning but once I separated the different parts I began mind mapping ideas to make each step easier.

Learning the methods of arrangement and formatting, as explained by Berko (1998), has helped me to structure the final assignment more confidently as I can now see how the speech will fall in to place.  Before reading about these methods, I felt quite overwhelmed by the speech writing process and how I was going to convey my key messages.

Even though the slideshow is a good visual concept, I didn’t find it helped with the actual speech writing process.  The preparation stage and planning table were adequate enough for me to complete the activity and organise my ideas for the assignment.



Ames, K 2016, COMM12033 speech and script term 1 2016, lesson 6: Genres of speech – corporate, CQUniversity, Brisbane.

Berko R., Wolvin, A., & Wolvin, D. (eds.), 1998, Communication : a social and career focus, Houghton Mifflin Company, Boston, pp. 326-353, URL: http://library-resources.cqu.edu.au/cro/protected/comm12033/comm12033_cro2368.pdf

Davies, M 2011, ‘Concept mapping, mind mapping and argument mapping: what are the differences and do they matter?’, Higher Education, 62, 3, pp. 279-301, Academic Search Complete, EBSCOhost, viewed 7 May 2016.




Week one

Workbook activities

Importance of voice

  1. In summery, I believe talk is merely conversing ideas and thoughts where as speech is a formal address of thoughts to an audience (Oxford Dictionaries 2016).
  2. I believe a speech is more formal than a talk.  The Oxford Dictionaries (2016) suggests that a speech is a formal address of discourse delivered to an audience and a talk is a conversation or discussion. Yes, I would prepare differently for a speech compared to a talk.  I would do this by carefully considering the way I delivered my speech to a chosen audience, such as sounds and expressions in my voice.

Julia Gillard discussion

Personally, Julia Gillard’s voice and speech manner never done her any favours.  During her three years as Australia’s Prime Minister, I found her voice to be grating, robotic and unemotional.  She does, however, speak with intent and intellect. Frankel (2011) reports that Julia Gillard and Kevin Rudd had similar speech styles. Both have highly accomplished speech skills, both can deliver monologues with articulation clarity and stumble-free fluency, and both are highly intelligent. Both also have an annoying dominant characteristic to their speech that dissonates with the public.

In comparison, her famous “Misogyny” speech was quite different. Her voice at times waivers but for the most part she owned the floor in Parliament that day.  The drive and anger in her voice commanded attention and not only did she receive it but the Opposition was completely intimidated and overwhelmed by her.

My positive reaction to Gillard’s speech is definitely influenced by both the content and delivery of her speech. The quotes, emotion and authority in her voice created a damaging portrayal of Tony Abbott and the Opposition. Gillard’s speech has deservedly become a historical moment in Australian women’s politics.

In general, if Julia Gillard possessed a voice similar to actress Cate Blanchett I believe the public and media would have attacked her less.  Blanchett would no doubt have received years of voice training and her speech reflects this.  Her voice can be nasally but still very fluid, strong and feminine.  There is no trace of the “Gillard twang” (2011) yet she still sounds distinctly Australian.

News Script

Voice critique

I feel my voice sounds incredibly young in this recording.  I will have to learn to speak louder and more confidently to overcome this trait. I also speak too fast and don’t breath enough.  More practice will help slow my speech and improve my breathing rate. However, I do speak clearly and pronounce words accurately.



Oxford Dictionaries 2016, http://www.oxforddictionaries.com/definition/english/speech, viewed 28 February 2016.

Sydney Morning Herald 2011, Drop the Gillard twang: it’s beginning to annoy, http://www.smh.com.au/federal-politics/political-opinion/drop-the-gillard-twang-its-beginning-to-annoy-20110420-1dosf.html, viewed 29 February 2016.